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Comments on 'Say No To The Empire'

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Holly H.Just as fascinating as the substance of the dissidence here -- the idea that the Empire isn’t perfect and that people do speak out against it -- is this idea of a whole organized, official response built on the concept of discrediting the speakers. This counter-propaganda is incredibly sophisticated, considering you’ve not only got Ressun here to toss in disagreement, but the other woman who is undermining the speaker’s position more subtly. (Not just throwing the speaker off his game, but also being publicly nasty in order to associate the speaker’s position, in onlookers’ minds, with “behaving badly”.) I do agree with the non-member-artist commenter that the word “proselytize” is probably what’s wanted. However, I feel like it’s worth pointing out that just because Torn World has this big, well-developed, and very organized Empire, to which many characters belong, and thus, that many characters support, doesn’t necessarily mean *the writers* are holding up the Empire as a good thing. It seems likely to me that we’re *supposed* to see the cracks in the Empire’s successful facade.
Sofia LindströmOoooh, this is insidious and I love it! I love how there's not only Rassun arguing against the anti-Empire protester but also a strategy to use people _agreeing_ with the protestor to take the protester down! That is beyond evil and super creepy. Adore it and I want more!
Non-Member ArtistTo "apotheosize" something is to deify or glorify it. I think what you actually wanted to say in that second paragarph was "proselytizing" which is to preach to a crowd. Also, if I understood this story correctly, what it most closely reminds me of is people in China who are hired to place pro-China remarks in chatrooms and blogs (oh yes, they exist). I must admit that one of the most fundamental problems with the Empire in torn world is that the basic premise is faulty; you assume that a government which has significant economic and political control over its people will not use that control in non-benevolent ways and that few-to-none will eventually end up being repressed or abused under their incredibly pervasive licensing system. While I might let you get away with that premise if the Empire and Torn World were populated by aliens, considering that the race in question is human, I consider this to be an incredibly unlikely premise that is not born out by the historical evidence.
Toni SturtevantI love this! It says so much about the complexity of the South. Both about the complexity of the empire and it's denigrators.
Valerie Joanne HigginsLove this for the really urban feel, and the gadget. Want one of those.
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