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Comments on 'The Forgotten City'

Please note: These comments are the personal opinons of members, and do not represent any sort of official judgement, even if they are made by people in club management.  Everyone deserves respect for their creativity; but if you find a critical comment on one of your works, please don't take it personally.  On the other hand, personal attacks are not tolerated and any comment containing them will be deleted as soon as we discover it!

Holly H.The glimpse of the city and its gravity-defying situation is as dramatic for the reader as it must be for the explorers! I can sympathize with the way Diren and Margaa are instantly caught up in wanting to study EVERYthing about it. But it's also a good reminder that the scale is just... you could spend years only studying that city, hell, the two of them and an entire team of archaeologists could probably spend the rest of their LIVES on it. I very much appreciate Malaamig's bluntly practical solution to get them moving again. :) Surveying really can't stop for in-depth investigations.
Layla LawlorI really love the ruined city - one of my favorite things about Torn World is the ancient, ruined civilization aspect of it (I have always loved that kind of thing) and this short piece really brought out that aspect of the world. (Heh, I also like the way that Malaamig's pragmatic reaction to it contrasts with the scientists!)
Elizabeth BarretteI really enjoyed reading this story about finding such unusual ruins.
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