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Comments on 'Railplay, Pt 2'

Please note: These comments are the personal opinons of members, and do not represent any sort of official judgement, even if they are made by people in club management.  Everyone deserves respect for their creativity; but if you find a critical comment on one of your works, please don't take it personally.  On the other hand, personal attacks are not tolerated and any comment containing them will be deleted as soon as we discover it!

Holly H.I’m definitely glad to see that Bai’s suspicions have firmed up by the end. Yes he SHOULD feel as if he’s been made to play a role, and that SHOULDN’T sit well with him. It still leaves me wondering whether the people pulling the strings realize how obvious they’re being, and whether they care. On another note, I was glad to get to meet Rai, and Urti, in this two-parter! It’s good to see the cast of characters expand.
PeggyBPoor Bai!!! I really felt with him here. I liked how you picked up several other story lines here with hints to Olarali and Layla/Dini. I am glad I started reading stories about the Empire. I feel less intimidated by the complexity of this society since.
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