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Comments on 'Out of Steam, Part 4'

Please note: These comments are the personal opinons of members, and do not represent any sort of official judgement, even if they are made by people in club management.  Everyone deserves respect for their creativity; but if you find a critical comment on one of your works, please don't take it personally.  On the other hand, personal attacks are not tolerated and any comment containing them will be deleted as soon as we discover it!

Holly H.Lots of great details in here! Kalitelm definitely makes an impression, I like her already. And it’s still tantalizing to see what looks like almost-breakthroughs in the language. I’m very interested to see where that goes. (There could be lots of reasons, at this point, that Kalitelm seems to understand the word “sick”, or that Malaamig seems to recognize some words here and there. I’m not yet sure what it means.) (At least, at the time of first reading, I wasn’t sure what it meant! I have a better understanding of how that’s all working now, and it’s much clearer.)
PeggyBI hadn't had imagined Kalitelm bing so comanding and in charge... but I liked it.
Elizabeth BarretteYay! Kalitelm is impressive.
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