Comments on 'Out of Steam, Part 1'
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|Holly H.||Malaamig's decision to split the party is the only one that makes sense, and I was glad to see that Diren was smart enough not to question it. And boy, did I identify with Malaamig at the end! Submerging in a hot spring is the best thing! But WOW, fantastic cliffhanger! :D (When I had just started to wonder if there would in fact be any people around at all.) (I am new enough in my reading that I actually don't have a good sense of whether there's a wild version of the snowies that you could encounter without people around.) (Update: apparently not! Not that Malaamig himself could know that, so my confusion about that at first reading worked well.)|
|PeggyB||I finally came around to continue reading this story collection. And wheeee, what a cliffhanger!|
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