Torn World; Comments on 'Colors of Change'

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Sofia Lindstrom

The very science focused start a nice little wake-up call for me, to realize that the snow-unicorn riders are more "advanced" than I first thought. The description of the snow-unicorns hit home to me how big they really are. I hadn't quite pictured them in my head even with the aid of all the lovely art (because I am bad at that) but the way you've described riding them helped me along to finally get a mental pictures of the critters - and it's an impressive one! The way you've described the Others did the same from me. Picturing them as oily was both unsettling and brilliant to experience! I have much sympathy for Kativa - being in that position of "almost grown up" is unnerving and frustrating at times. The supernatural element to her coming of age story was well executed; it felt neither telegraphed or out of the blue. Curious to see where this newfound power takes her!

Amelia Margetts

Featured in LJ Community's Writing Spotlight 9-3-2013!

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