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Comments on 'Breaking Trail, Part 1'

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Holly H.Always good to get the other perspective, and of COURSE Malaamig’s arrival is the talk of the village. The precaution of the quarantine is VERY wise, too. But I was more interested here in all of the little indications that the Northerners, too, know that the world was split -- especially the way they seem to somewhat understand Malaamig; but at the same time, the idea of contact with other people seems almost shocking? (Maybe “shocking” is not the right word, because everyone’s reactions are quite calm. But clearly the idea of there being other people out there is exciting and new. I did like Kativa’s little comment about “wild snowies” -- the indication of how she is expecting these other lands to be very much like their own land, and she doesn’t even conceive yet how very different the worlds of the other shards might be.) (In retrospect, that speculations about “wild snowies” is also very interesting, since it seems to mean that the Northerners might not know that there *is* no wild equivalent of the snowies? They must know there are none there in their Shard… but they don’t know that there might not be some elsewhere. Hmm.)
PeggyBMan, I so like those Northerners!
Elizabeth BarretteI'm intrigued by Kativa and Birka discussing the stranger!
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