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Holly H.I felt such a strong, dismayed sympathy for Malaamig in the first part of the story -- the moment when he feels uneasy, but doesn't want to double down on that uneasiness and make them leave. I can understand that, although you'd think someone of his experience would be more ready to trust his instincts. But perhaps he thought Diren and Margaa don't know him well enough to trust him? Everything reported about that valley made me uneasy as well. But really, who knows if they would have fared any better even if they had left when he wanted them to? Perhaps the damage to the horses was already done, since they could hardly have anticipated keeping them from eating when they first arrived. I'm also intrigued by the fact that -- of course -- we don't really get to find out what caused it. It's a mystery to us, just as it is to them. (I'm only a little surprised to see that even Diren, a geologist, didn't advance any theories, even after having the information that the horses all died after extensive grazing. My own first question would have been about minerals in the plants they were eating.) I wonder if we'll ever find out? (Through stories, I mean. I realize there’s a write-up about the place that can be read, although I only looked at that after the story.)
Non-Member ArtistI agree, seeing the city-fed scientists paired with the dour outdoorsman is a treat. I like this group, and how patient Malaamig is with them. This is a very well told tale, and one that I can really empathize with. It has happened more than once where I set out on a long trip into the wild all agog at the beauty to the point where I forget how hard nature can be and how humbling it is to realize that when you put civilization at your back, there is very little left for you to control. This was a sobering and inspiring story. Can't wait to see where they go next!
PeggyBOh, I feel with the two scientists, not used to physical exertion at all. ;) I like how science-y Diren and Margaa seem to be: overly enthusiastic and prone to lose sight of the whole, big picture while concentrating on the small things committedly. Nice to see them in contrast to practical Malaamig.
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