Comments on 'Railroaded'
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| Holly H. | Okay, a LOT going on there! Twin dilemmas brewing! I liked how the opening scene establishes the city underworld, and also plants the idea that Olarali is in on it, so that it doesn’t come as a big surprise (to us) when someone high up in the Carnal Guild pulls Ressa aside. And at least that whole thing seems plausible, though puzzling to Ressa. It just barely makes sense that they wouldn’t necessarily want her to be celibate for *years* while holding a Carnal license. But, POOR YEFF! Gosh. It’s very interesting that they haven’t at all tried to cover their tracks with Yeff. He knows that this is all sketchy, and *because* he knows, he also knows of the very real dangers of trying to refuse or go to the authorities. If they could murder a couple of senior railcar drivers, then he stands little chance. :( As it is, I’m a bit worried about his eventual fate, since I absolutely gather that Ressa is the bigger fish here, in their way to netting ever larger catches (like Bai). Poor Yeff seems very expendable, in that equation. |
| Amelia Margetts | Featured in LJ Community's Writing Spotlight 1-8-2013! |
| PeggyB | I really enjoyed this one and the foreshading it gave. You got me hooked. |
| Lorna (Comtessa) | The plot thickens indeed! I loved it! |
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