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Comments on 'Asleep'

Please note: These comments are the personal opinons of members, and do not represent any sort of official judgement, even if they are made by people in club management.  Everyone deserves respect for their creativity; but if you find a critical comment on one of your works, please don't take it personally.  On the other hand, personal attacks are not tolerated and any comment containing them will be deleted as soon as we discover it!

Holly H.It’s nice to get a look at Oranaan’s routine from his viewpoint, and this story creates some intriguing set-up for the future plot (between the mysterious rotund gentleman, the stolen sketchbook, and the interesting bookie who seems to be offering a reward out of proportion with the favor he’s asking). It’s a shame that it seems like the intended next two parts of the story weren’t written.
Non-Member ArtistDirty politics and a somewhat naive genius. Recipe for disaster or the greatest streak of luck ever seen. I am looking forward to the next two stories in this arc.
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