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Comments on 'Lightning Strikes'

Please note: These comments are the personal opinons of members, and do not represent any sort of official judgement, even if they are made by people in club management.  Everyone deserves respect for their creativity; but if you find a critical comment on one of your works, please don't take it personally.  On the other hand, personal attacks are not tolerated and any comment containing them will be deleted as soon as we discover it!

Sofia LindströmAh, the City of Lights! I haven't gotten into this storyline yet, but this was an excellent introduction that left me wanting more. I also want to get to know Oranaan and Emeroma better - their dynamic was interesting and that final line " Emeroma had long since learned that if she didn't let Oranaan know she didn't think he could do something, he wouldn't guess that he couldn't" was brilliant.
Holly H.Hmmm! Well, it’s a working theory, at least! And one that has some empirical evidence to back it up. That’s a start, even if it doesn’t prove to be the right track. (I’ll be interested to see if it is or not!)

(I was a little taken aback to realize that this story was set 5 years after the last set of stories where the anomaly first showed up. Just because, it doesn’t quite FEEL that way, in the story. It does feel as if time has passed, and they’ve been investigating it, but 5 years is a long time. Although, there was the sense that the new city is slowly emptying out, presumably as people become afraid to stay there. That does help give the sense of time passing and a slow decline.)

Non-Member ArtistOoh, this is really interesting! And Oranaan continues to crack me up--but I love how Emeroma deals with him.
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