Comments on 'The Experiment'
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| Holly H. | I liked how this simple, beginners-level physics experiment taps into something new and weird, even if it’s in a way that the boys can’t yet comprehend. But we readers can! And it’s interesting how it ties in with the later poem, The Urge to Fly, underscoring why the Empire’s scientists don’t reach for high altitudes very often. I did wonder at the end whether Oranaan suspected that what happened was related to the anomalies he’s been studying; or whether he’s just been diverted by something interesting and mysterious. (My only criticism is that I would have liked a better sense of the ages of the boys. I’m too new a reader to be able to equate “first form†with an age, yet. So I gathered they were both young, but I wasn’t sure how young, or how old.) |
| Amelia Margetts | Featured in LJ Community's Writing Spotlight 1-22-13! |
| Edward Cammarota | I like things that blow up..... Ok, Ok, I thought that the experiment was more believable not working out the way it was supposed to or the way he expexted it to. Always wanting more when I read your stories.... |
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