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Comments on 'It's Not Just About Firolk'

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Amelia MargettsFeatured in LJ Community's Writing Spotlight 5-1-12!
Deirdre / Wyld_DandelyonI liked this story! :-D
Non-Member ArtistYou already know that I love this piece, but I'm leaving a comment to tell you exactly why I love it. First off, I find the two characters you've paired up here bounce off each other very well. They're not total opposites, but neither are each other's mirror images. The way it's very obvious that Lei is still in development as an artist is very, very vivid - both in comparison to the more nuanced Ashegoi, but also in the way taking in her surroundings is still not all that natural to her. It makes me curious to know how she reacts to her audience at this point! And impressed at how far she has come from this point to the current time. Besides that, the piece is suggestive enough that I want to read more about these two together, to figure out more about their balances and counterweights. What binds them together, besides their profession? What does Aschegoi see in Lei? And the other way around? So many questions, but enough information given that the story is far from empty. Humour always helps too. ;) Men are pigs deep inside, yes. If you asked Ushan, she'd inform you that you wouldn't even have to look that far to be able to tell. Unless you're blind. Or have lost your sense of smell. Good job!
Lorna (Comtessa)“So all men are just pigs underneath?” My quote of the day! A really cool short story that is packed with personality.
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